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Ok, show off your skills.
Please tell a story using exactly 5 sentences. Bragging rights to the best one.
Please tell a story using exactly 5 sentences. Bragging rights to the best one.
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Re: Super-short story challenge-an exercise.
Thu, March 29, 2007 - 4:30 PMYou are so on!
I'll have one for you.
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Here's a quickie... (5 sentences plus title)
Thu, March 29, 2007 - 5:18 PM_In the Bathroom, Last Night_
He was a Southern House Spider, folded in on himself atop a three-gallon, clear plastic jug. Then his legs unfolded like brown petals and he went from dead to living, long enough for my camera to capture him on macro and close enough for me to look into his eyes.
He crawled a bit when I returned him to his perch, then crossed his eight legs again and became a tiny ball.
I busied myself with my field guides while Mary brought him to the compost pile. What killed him remains a mystery: old age, starvation, or the thirst of being separated from three gallons of water by a membrane stronger than silk.
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Thu, March 29, 2007 - 11:50 PMConcentrated
Anything’s possible, she told me. But then again, she believes in that kind of thing (you should see her bookshelves full of oracle-this and wisdom-that).
“Go outside and look at the sky. If you still feel small, then you can see what you can fill up.”
The sun was setting but it was still too hot for this time of year.
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Poppie
Fri, March 30, 2007 - 5:49 AMA kitchen knife protruded from Poppie’s chest, the hammer still in his hand, a sharp odor of exertion and fear tinged the air. He was lying there in his bed, still conscious, blinking at Mom and me as though surprised, and perhaps guilty that we had found him still in his body—his solitary escape gone awry.
I stared from the knife to my grandfather’s agonized expression, his gray eyes watery but clear, and he held my gaze for several heartbeats as though willing me to understand his pain, and his decision—he was finished with life and wanted to go on to whatever happened afterward.
I couldn’t breathe to speak, but it was was Poppie who broke the silence saying, “Get her out of here” in that gruff voice that was always his way.
I gave him one last look—a lasting vivid memory—before Mom shoved me mechanically out of the room, and I listened to her calling 911, her voice a haze of calm covering a deep chasm of rage, knowing that it would come out eventually, but not until everything was over, since that’s how it was in our family.
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Fri, March 30, 2007 - 7:01 PMI like the minimalist and abstract...
The long dark hallway left me whirling.
Fumble, clunk, crash.
Search for the familiar in space.
Guide me through the long dark expanse.
To the porcelain chair. -
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Sat, March 31, 2007 - 12:09 AMIt's hard not to verge towards poetry in these micro-fictions. -
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Sat, March 31, 2007 - 8:21 AMI think these are great! -
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Sat, March 31, 2007 - 8:38 AM
At first taste, I knew it was meant to be; it was like the final piece of the abstract puzzle of my life finally fell into place and I felt finally, blissfully whole.
Others couldn't understand our love, and I was ridiculed, vilified, and made an outcast because I would do anything, say anything, even steal to be with my beloved.
In the intensity of my passion, my physical body began to change, and in my mind's eye I could envision that I was becoming the perfect vessel for the soft cushiony bliss that followed even the slightest brush with the object of my desire.
I just knew that without this feeling, I would surely die a painful death, my body wracked with misery that chewed its way to the very center of my soul.
That's why I killed her; that bitch was holding my junk and I just had to have it. -
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Sat, March 31, 2007 - 7:06 PMWhen did junk become a euphemism? -
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Sat, March 31, 2007 - 11:12 PMWhat? A euphemism for heroin? *confused puppy dog head tilt* -
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Sun, April 1, 2007 - 12:33 AMSorry, thought she was holding his "junk", you know, his "stuff", his "package", his "manliness"
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Sun, April 1, 2007 - 9:21 AMLOL, I guess you could take it that way if you want. Chalk one up to me not writing with clarity, or you having your imagination going another way for some reason!
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Tue, April 10, 2007 - 1:28 PMIn the park, sitting alone on the simply uncomfortable concrete bench donated to the city by Eldrich and Claire Blume, I strike a first, a second, and a third match before successfully lighting a cigarette. I relish the burn in my lungs and ignore the sun, the breeze rustling the leaves of the birch tree shading me, and distract myself in the actions of a beetle worrying a bit of dandelion fluff at my feet. It works oblivious to my presence, my size beyond the scope of its comprehension; my threat an abstraction like evolution. So many things that could otherwise occupy my meditation —the two stubbornly purple iris stalking up in a group of yellow cousins; the two squirrels barking a corkscrew path around the hickory tree; the pair of ravens arguing from opposite corners of the common area— but I am fascinated by the simple workings of a nondescript beetle perfectly unaware at my feet. When I walk away, I regret, for just a moment, the crushing sound under my heel, more felt than heard, drowned out by the spring wind.
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Tue, April 10, 2007 - 2:17 PMMaybe it's just me, but it seems like there's an opportunity here for publishing an anthology of 5-line fictions. It would make the perfect travel book for that long plane ride or trip to the beach.
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Tue, April 10, 2007 - 2:21 PMYeah, baby!
The anthology should be called "We write, and you suck!"
*runs and hides*
Wouldn't it be cool if we could sell that idea? -
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Tue, April 10, 2007 - 2:34 PMYes, it would.
Anybody know an agent?
Oh, and I kind of liked my little off-the-cuff creation and have submitted it to a couple journals. We shall see. It was a fun exercise to try to create a fully-realized character in such a limited space. I've always been a fan of flash fiction for that very reason. -
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Tue, April 10, 2007 - 2:37 PMHa ha! If I knew an agent, I would be much happier with the progress of my work than I am now, perhaps.
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Tue, April 10, 2007 - 2:46 PMditto.
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Wed, April 11, 2007 - 9:52 PMOkay, so thanks to Stacie for the exercise. I submitted, on a whim, my little 5-line piece to "why vandalism?," an on-line journal posting a call for submissions in the tribe. lol
I need to submit things on a whim more often. They'll publish it in the May '07 issue. Not anything to get all excited about, but I still think it makes for a fun(ny) story.
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Wed, April 11, 2007 - 9:57 PMNot anything to get excited about? You are mental, right? That's AWESOME!!
I'll have to dig up some more exercises, then. -
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Wed, April 11, 2007 - 10:29 PMWell...I would be excited if it was in New Yorker or some such. I tend not to get excited about on-line pubs. I'm flattered, don't get me wrong. I just think the whole story of it getting published is funny. Take a hiatus from Tribe. The day I come back, take 10 minutes to write on an exercise here. Submit it to obscure journal on a whim. Get it published. That's just...something. lol -
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Thu, April 12, 2007 - 5:55 AMCongratulations! Excited or not, Stacie's exercise and "why vandalism?" led to your submitting "on a whim" -- *and* you garnered a new item for your bibliography in the process. Submitting on a whim more often = submitting more often, and who knows where that may lead? -
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Thu, April 12, 2007 - 10:52 AMyes! That point I agree with whole-heartedly. I spend so much time on working, writing, and reading submissions that I neglect my own submitting. What I liked about the story was the serendipity of the whole thing. It's a nice reminder, or slap in the face, that good things happen when you work at them. -
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Thu, April 12, 2007 - 2:38 PMGood to see you back on brother. -
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Thu, April 12, 2007 - 2:42 PMThanks! Good to be back on.
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